poem

[nickvb123]

Check out this poem i wrote about coasting. I had to write 6 poems for an english project. It will be interesting to see the feed back from my teacher....



Free verse poem - One Wheel: Unreal

My feet leave the pedals to rest on the frame,
The wheel transforms into a wild beast,
That I try to ride with uncompromising zeal,
But its’ will is set against me, it won’t let me ride,
It wishes to throw me down to the ground,
Leave me stranded for my endeavour to master it,
But somehow I stay up, riding the impossible,
Defying physics, arms waving like a stormy sea,
Perched precariously, the pinnacle of balance,
Stretching the limits of human ability.

As the wheel rotates, my concentration keeps me up,
Despite the waves of ecstatic elation,
That flood through my head like an overflowing dam.
5, 10, 15, the metres pass by,
I feel I could go forever, confidence sky high,
From accomplishing super human feats of excellence.

Then all comes crashing down, breaking the image of splendour,
Dropping me back to earth to grovel in the dust of reality,
To sink back to the depths from which I arose,
Count to 3 and then I’m back up to give it my 100th attempt!


This is the picture i put in with it. ( it is coasting. if you look closely his feet aren't touching the tire).


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[Mellick]

That's a good one... it has rhythm, good job man.

[nickvb123]

cheers.

[paco]

Nice poem. We should have more unicycling poetry.

Just a little hint though.

But its' will is set against me, it won’t let me ride,

There is no apostrophe in its, unless you are using the contraction of it is. It's one of the most common errors in English because it seems to go against the rule of possession. You see professional publications that make the mistake all the time.
(I'm marrying a college English teacher).