A poem/song thing I wrote.

[Unitik908]

Some mild language, just a heads up.
Tell me what you think.
enjoy

A little thing called life


Whether it may be
kicking around the rock
rolling around the block
smokin all that pot
whatever it may be
I choose it to set me free
from my preformed destiny
of amounting to nothing, never to succeed

Life to many may seem
fun and free like a dream
but for those like me
the drive, the will, desire never
seems to deam themselves necessary

I may appear care free, but the
thoughts of life, future, and
the unknown terrorfy me
skeptiscism trys to keep me sain
never believing I'll end up like kobain
being, meaning something
is all i really strive for
knowing this why do I refuse to try
instead have my head implanted in the sky
sleeping on this lie, that all will end up fine.

Going to school, the prison for the lazy
for many it is all just a joke
the brilliant potential lost of all
those who have been diluted
I really hate to say it, myself included.
sending me further down the hall,
forcing me up that never ending wall
we call life.

31 days to name and
what do I have to acount for it?
Not a God damn thing.
Could have done so much
but instead did so little.
Alone, isolated, depressed
choosing the easy way out.

I've had chances to do something for the better
but instead chose to lift a single finger.
To many regrets, not enough pride
sends me sliding down that familiar path
we call life.

Pressure from the free world.
Pressure from society; to be on top
number 1 for all to see; to be the pennicale of conformity.
Pressure from parents; like a whip accross my back.
Pressure to fill them with pride and I just subside and hide
by running and getting high.
Always expecting so much, yet saying so little
Forcing me to lean on my one true crutch
that is the energy, love, and support
of my dearest friends.
Knowing that no matter how bad I fuck up
they will be with me 'till the bittersweet end.

I choose what I choose to set me free
from my preformed destiny
of amounting to nothing, never to succeed.

Just thought I'd share that.

Chase

[JJtheunicycle]

thats really good, i liked the 2nd to last paragraph

[dudewithasock]

I sorta skimmed it, but I like what I saw.

[saskatchewanian]

thats really good, i liked the 2nd to last paragraph

My thoughts exactly, very well done.

[munimanpete]

Nice dude, good writing, cheers for sharing.

[Ducttape]

nice dude...... I can totally well, get it you know?

[wickedbob]

That is grrrreat I really like it. That was most awesome..... totally........

[MuniAddict]

That was great! I enjoyed it and I feel your pain. I used to have pretty bad bouts with depression, and so one day about 10 years ago I decided to write a poem about how I was feeling, thinking it would be good therepy.

It came to me pretty quickly and literally flowed out of my pen as you see it below. This is the *first* time I've ever shared this with anyone, let alone a forum!:) Here it is:


"My Due" by Terry Peterson (Written in 1996)


In the frozen cold of winter, shivering in the night
I pray for death to claim me, before the morning light
All those I've loved have gone, but still I go on and on...

Ah, but that's the cruelest fate of all;
to be left alone when loved ones fall

I have no means for food or shelter,
And in the heat of day when others swelter
I huddle in a corner, still and numb,
Shattered spirit, forgotten son!

A sea of life's misfortunes, has washed upon the sand,
And in its wake has left... this bitter, sad old man
'Though worthless and wretched, and pennyless too,
Pity me not, for this is my due.

Terry Peterson

[wickedbob]

That was cool to...

[Ducttape]

That was great! I enjoyed it and I feel your pain. I used to have pretty bad bouts with depression, and so one day about 10 years ago I decided to write a poem about how I was feeling, thinking it would be good therepy.

It came to me pretty quickly and literally flowed out of my pen as you see it below. This is the *first* time I've ever shared this with anyone, let alone a forum!:) Here it is:


"My Due" by Terry Peterson (Written in 1996)


In the frozen cold of winter, shivering in the night
I pray for death to claim me, before the morning light
All those I've loved have gone, but still I go on and on...

Ah, but that's the cruelest fate of all;
to be left alone when loved ones fall

I have no means for food or shelter,
And in the heat of day when others swelter
I huddle in a corner, still and numb,
Shattered spirit, forgotten son!

A sea of life's misfortunes, has washed upon the sand,
And in its wake has left... this bitter, sad old man
'Though worthless and wretched, and pennyless too,
Pity me not, for this is my due.

Terry Peterson
cool, again I can relate.... all I can say is.... I can totally well, get it you know?

[spazdude222]

It's good. You've got talent, but I personally don't like it. It seems too depressing for my taste.

[dudewithasock]

It's good. You've got talent, but I personally don't like it. It seems too depressing for my taste.

+1

[MuniAddict]

It's good. You've got talent, but I personally don't like it. It seems too depressing for my taste.YEah I hear you. Of course some of the greatest works in poetry, music and film have *quite* tragic themes/overtones. Poe, Shakespere, beethoven, Dylan, Spielberg, Bergman.

So I'm in good company I guess, even though I'm a nobody!:rolleyes: And more films with dramatic themes have won critical acclaim and awards than comedies or stuff like, say, "Kindergarten cop". And people in general will usually gravitate towards less challenging stuff like "Meet the Fockers", then say, "Schindler's list", which is obviously a great film but because of the serious content, not the runaway box office of a "Star Wars" for example, which is pure escapist entertainment. But then there are exceptions, such as "The Passion of the Christ", which I hated by the way! Talk about depressing and brutally violent, but it was a qualified box office Monster, and one of the highest grossing films ever.

There's a place for "fluff" and light-hearted fair, but I also appreciate art that has a lasting impact and actually tries to say something, whether positive or negative.

That poem I wrote doesn't represent who I am today, and was even a bit exaggerated for effect when written for, "Poetic license".

[Funicycle]

Nice, needs more cowbell :P

[MuniAddict]

Nice, needs more cowbell :PFellas, fellas, what's up? That last take...was even better than the last one! Guys, I'm tellin' ya, I gotta feva! And the only prescription...is MORE COWBELL!:D

[dudewithasock]

Nice, needs more cowbell :P

Hahaha, I lol'd. :p

[Unitik908]

Here is another one I actually typed onto my computer.

The Smart Little Pig
By: C. A. Meneely

I may be the stone the bulider refused
at least I'm not getting used cast aside
without a second thought blending in with
the growing wall of those being consumed
by the needs of conformity
It's a shame that it's the unthinking majority
that holds themselves higher
over us
the unwanted masonry

How can you live with society thinking for you
Making personal insight into life but a mere historical fact
Acting on the spelled out clues causes us to loose
our sense of self; the difference between me and you
Civilisation at a whole morphing into one, the ways of new
culture, care, curiosity, despair are no longer needed because
thoughts of emotion are being super ceded by the very
things we created

The new age blinded youth are walking
unknowingly confused about the true worth that our
beautiful mother earth has to offer
Brainwashed by the givers of life
Born, live, and die without a meaning
Untapped potential is the new world fuel
that we so desperately need
Why can't people see that counting to infinity
is an easy possibility if only these brain bending
boundaries would be blown away
by the back breaking big bad wolf

[Goats_On_Unicycles]

I really like it. You have a gift with words.
<3

[patsandy100]

Wow all 3 of those poems are excellent, and i know how both the first and second show the truth at some points. About a year ago, I was unquesionably depressed but I went to this Camp where I met some people some teenagers which gave me everything I needed. Since then Ive started unicycling *some kids had a uni there which sparked my insperation* and have been alot more happy.

[Kyle_Destroyer]

You might like this thread:

http://www.unicyclist.com/forums/showthread.php?t=69220

-kyle

[Chrashing]

Some mild language, just a heads up.
Tell me what you think.
enjoy

A little thing called life


Whether ....
Just thought I'd share that.

Chase

Great poem, Sounds really positive to me. Like your not satisfied with the status quo, want bigger and better better things. It's good that your not accepting and want more. I expect this attidue will help you succeed.